oh yeah, and... [poetry & desperate plea]

Planning on submitting the following semi-old piece to this issue of the school's lit magazine. I think I've a few minor edits to make before I do that, but... I'm still totally desperate for feedback of any sort, before I throw this to the wolves on the magazine staff to be ripped into tiny little pieces. Please?


leaving the ocean

an hour of sunshine
has dried the water
leaving only stiff salt
crackling in your hair
parting from dark waves
that grabbed you, twisted
submerged you helpless
dashed you to the sandy bed
where you lay as the waves receded
frothing back to the rocks
you staggered
to the bright umbrella
and lay pondering
and then forgot.

strangely accurate (fun with name meanings)

This one's from this site. Sarcastic and/or surprised comments of mine in bold.

The name of Alison gives you a clever, quick, analytical mind, but you suffer with a great deal of self-consciousness, lack of confidence, and much aloneness because of misunderstandings. Creepily accurate. Eek -- stop reading my mind! Your idealistic and sensitive nature gives you a deep appreciation for the finer things of life and a strong desire to be of service to humanity. Kind of. There are times when you experience inner turbulence at your inability to say what you mean. It is far easier for you to express your deeper thoughts and feelings through writing than verbally. YES! You find pleasure in literature, in poetry, and in your ideals and will turn to them when you feel you have been misunderstood. Yup... You are deeply moved by the beauties of life, especially nature. Because your feelings run deep, you must guard against the ups and downs, being very inspired one minute, then moody, reserved, and depressed the next. Yeah, I suppose... Your reactions to people vary according to how you feel. Yup. You tend to be secretive and noncommittal about private matters, yet at times you will talk effusively in order to hide your self-consciousness or to lead others away from personal subjects. Somewhat. There're some "private matters" and "personal subjects" that I won't touch, I suppose, but seeing as I've got this whole diary thing going on... You are inspired by encouragement from others, yet suspicious of their intent. Too true. You crave affection but seldom find anyone who understands your nature. Yeah... Physical weaknesses would show in your heart, lungs, or bronchial organs. None of this really... of course, IMHO I'm just one big walking physical weakness...

i'm bored.

I so did not just admit that.

And I am not finishing off my fifth or sixth hour of fooling around online today.

And I did not watch several episodes of Buffy that I'd seen already, multiple times.

Most especially, I am not at this point writing this entry out of the same boredom that fueled the previous activities... just so you know.

And when Monday rolls around and I've got school and work and Fountain all to worry about -- I will refuse to admit that this entry even exists. The same goes for Sunday night when I realize I've a weekend's worth of homework to do before I go to bed. Yeah.

On the plus side, I have found some amusing Buffy fanfiction, and even some devoted to Oz. [Beware evil popup ads on previous link!] So that's nice. :D I have also discovered than fanfiction.net's Find thingie sometimes simply does not work, which is inconvenient.